the lyrics weren't bad at all, and they seem to be mixed nice, i guess by now you have already updated the mix, but not the comment on the song?
anywho, i think you should write lyrics for the TT songwriting competition, just for fun, would amke you more confident on your singing. also, you should get more into singing. Vocals is the only part of your music preventing you from progressing in your musical career. You should seriously think about it.
oh. also compression. you should seriously think about more compression on your vocals
The-Red-Jack
Soul eater? The vocals ain't that bad